Original:
To be able to be part of the scientific Discourse you have to know the above specific signs and systems when you communicate with other scientists you can communicate efficiently.
Revised
To be able to be part of the scientific Discourse you have to know the above specific signs and systems, so when you communicate with other scientists you can communicate efficiently.
I used coordination correctly because they are both important, it explains why you have to know the signs and systems. Therefore both need to be one sentence and emphasized.
Original:
In the end, the use of building tasks to connect to the proper way of writing in a scientific Discourse is very useful because it helps with understanding as well as being able to actively participate in the discussions with your peers.
Revised:
In the end, the use of building tasks to connect to the proper way of writing in a scientific Discourse is very useful because it helps with the understanding of the discourse, also being able to actively participate in the discussions with your peers.
I used coordination in this compound sentence correctly because each clause is equally important. They both connect and flow together as a sentence. This is due to, explain that knowing the writing of scientific discourse is useful and including that it is how you are able to actively participate in the discourse.
Original:
I agree with what Gee is saying about the importance of knowing the signs and system in your secondary Discourse, we also see this discussed in the Nair Nair Chapter 2 Organization of a Research Paper:
Revised:
I agree with what Gee is saying about the importance of knowing the signs and system in your secondary Discourse since we also see this discussed in the Nair Nair Chapter 2 Organization of a Research Paper:
I use subordination correctly here because the first sentence is showed that it holds more importance than the next part of the sentence because of “since”.
Original:
In Gees Building tasks he discusses connections, which is when languages can make connections to other activities like participating in a Discourse, or while reading a journal in a that Discourse.
Revised:
In Gees Building tasks he discusses connections, which is when languages can make connections to other activities like participating in a Discourse because while you read a journal in that Discourse you need to be able to connect it to your own work as well as to others.
I did the subordination correctly here when I used “because” to show that reason after is more important part of the sentence than the first part.
